#LyricalFictionFriday: Knock, Knock

holiday wreath on a door

There’s just something about him . . .

A woman’s decorative touch on the door tempts me to turn back, but the memories of Christmases spent alone keep me planted.

I pull the sleeves of my sweater over my fists to conceal what I hold in my hand.

I’m locked and loaded, completely focused. 

When she opens the door, I hook my finger around the trigger and fire. Point blank, dead center, right between the eyes. Her body crumples to the floor.

Now he knows how much I want this. Body still sore from the surgery— I’ve changed everything for him. My hair, the way I dress, how I speak. I’ve even killed.

As she lies dying, her eyes are still open. Sheer terror frozen in their gaze. I wonder about her last thought, before the bullet pierced her skull.

That an unsuspicious knock on the door, while gingerbread cookies bake in the oven, has snatched her life from her? Or that the face behind the wool-wrapped double-barreled pistol was her mirror image?

5 thoughts on “#LyricalFictionFriday: Knock, Knock

  1. WOW. I read this a few days ago and it has stuck with me since then. Such great writing–so well-crafted, well-timed, and vivid imagery! I love how you hint at so much without beating the reader over the head. I was especially impressed with the way the piece ended. What a great twist, that she had herself surgically made to look like her. AWESOME. I can’t wait to read more of your writing. I belong to this writer’s community which has been life-changing for me and I thought I’d just give you a heads up about it, in case you are looking to hang out with some other supportive bloggers who write. It’s called Yeah Write (www.yeahwrite.me) and they have all kinds of cool things going on, most notably a FREE weekly writing challenge (competition) for short nonfiction, flash fiction, and poetry. It’s such a friendly and welcoming group filled with excellent writers who gently comment on one another’s work. Anyway, I sound like a commercial. LOL. Like I said, I’ll be eager to read more of your writing. For now, Happy Holidays! 😀

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    1. I hate that it’s taken me so long to reply to your comment, but thanks so much for your kind words. I love a story with a good twist at the end. 😉 I’m glad you enjoyed and, and am even more ecstatic that I’ve gained a new follower! 😀 It’s funny that you mention Yeah Write because I used to participate regularly in their fiction challenges, but for whatever reason, I stopped (probably got too busy). But I really do hope to join the party again soon. You’ve sold me on it. 😉


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